DLC 1943 Text Corrections
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DLC 1943 Text Corrections
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Re: DLC 1943 Text Corrections
First Briefing, 2nd paragraph: "...retaken several majority cities..." should be major
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Kharkov 43 briefing:
1. In the second paragraph, "combat ready" needs a hyphen ("combat-ready," compound adjective).
2. In the third paragraph, where it says "Donets river" it should be "Donets River."
3. In the fourth paragraph, "high ranking" needs a hyphen ("high-ranking," same as #1).
1. In the second paragraph, "combat ready" needs a hyphen ("combat-ready," compound adjective).
2. In the third paragraph, where it says "Donets river" it should be "Donets River."
3. In the fourth paragraph, "high ranking" needs a hyphen ("high-ranking," same as #1).
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Kharkov '43 post-mission briefing for a Marginal Victory:
1. "Never-the-less" should be a single word.
1. "Never-the-less" should be a single word.
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Belgorod - BelgorodA.pzbrf
"No time for pleasantries today, Herr General, there is much work to be done still!"
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"No time for pleasantries today, Herr General. There is still much work to be done!"
"No time for pleasantries today, Herr General, there is much work to be done still!"
to
"No time for pleasantries today, Herr General. There is still much work to be done!"
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Belgorod post-mission briefing for a Major Victory:
Please correct me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't "However a new emergency in the North..." rather be "However an new emergency in the north"?
Please correct me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't "However a new emergency in the North..." rather be "However an new emergency in the north"?
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"North" should be lowercase, but the 'a' in the original briefing is correct.MusseMus wrote:Belgorod post-mission briefing for a Major Victory:
Please correct me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't "However a new emergency in the North..." rather be "However an new emergency in the north"?
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Thank you deducter, you are correct. English is not my first language, so in retrospective, I should not be getting involved in this topic 

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July 9th 1943 Kursk south 2nd paragraph says Tanks are seeing advancing.
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Yakovlevo mission briefing, last row:
Swap “of” and “up”
From “…but also be wary of the considerable build of up the Red Air Force units in this sector”
To “…But also be wary of the considerable buildup of the Red Air Force units in this sector”
Swap “of” and “up”
From “…but also be wary of the considerable build of up the Red Air Force units in this sector”
To “…But also be wary of the considerable buildup of the Red Air Force units in this sector”
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Kiev 43
The text reads "Not only are several lead Soviets units already assault Kiev, but there are scattered reports of a major paratrooper operation taking place."
1. -Lose the "S" on the end of Soviets
2. -assault(ing) Kiev is proper syntax, add "ING" to assault
3. -a major paratroop(er) operation, lose the "ER" on the end of paratroop
Dniepropetrovsk
1. "Great work holding the Panther-Wotan line again Herr General." The way this is written implies that the general has previously held the Panther-Wotan line. Perhaps something along the lines of "Holding the Panther-Wotan line is but another example of your great work." I really don't like that either but it's correct and uses the same language you had already employed. I just wanted to give you an idea of how to rework it with what you'd previously used.
Btw, I've been up for 30+ hours playing this DLC and lost my notes so I'm doing this from an admittedly addled brain.
Prohkorovka
While there were no mistakes per se in this scenario I think that the descriotion used to warn of Soviet aircraft was horribly understated. Planes EVERYWHERE...aaaahhhhh
The text reads "Not only are several lead Soviets units already assault Kiev, but there are scattered reports of a major paratrooper operation taking place."
1. -Lose the "S" on the end of Soviets
2. -assault(ing) Kiev is proper syntax, add "ING" to assault
3. -a major paratroop(er) operation, lose the "ER" on the end of paratroop
Dniepropetrovsk
1. "Great work holding the Panther-Wotan line again Herr General." The way this is written implies that the general has previously held the Panther-Wotan line. Perhaps something along the lines of "Holding the Panther-Wotan line is but another example of your great work." I really don't like that either but it's correct and uses the same language you had already employed. I just wanted to give you an idea of how to rework it with what you'd previously used.
Btw, I've been up for 30+ hours playing this DLC and lost my notes so I'm doing this from an admittedly addled brain.
Prohkorovka
While there were no mistakes per se in this scenario I think that the descriotion used to warn of Soviet aircraft was horribly understated. Planes EVERYWHERE...aaaahhhhh
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I agree said the red army aiforce would not be as strong.. How wrong they were!
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The second sentence is just the passive form of the first sentence. They mean the same thing, but in general you want to avoid the passive voice. I think the first sentence is fine.1. "Great work holding the Panther-Wotan line again Herr General." The way this is written implies that the general has previously held the Panther-Wotan line. Perhaps something along the lines of "Holding the Panther-Wotan line is but another example of your great work."
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DnipropetrovskB_decisive.pzbrf now reads
<p>Excellent work holding Dnipropetrovsk, Herr General! The Soviets have been beaten back for now and the Panther-Wotan line is secure, but rest assured that their offensive is not over yet. Be prepared for immediate deployment as their next crossing attempt will certainly come soon!</p>
KremenchugB_decisive.pzbrf now reads
<p>Great work holding the Panther-Wotan Line once again, Herr General! As before, the Soviets have been beaten back for now and the line is secure, but rest assured that their offensive is still not over yet. Intelligence seems to believe the next attack will strike somewhere North of Kiev, so we will be redeploying you to that sector. If they manage to encircle Kiev as we were able to do 2 years ago, our ability to hold the city will be seriously jeopardized!</p>
All issues above this post have been addressed. Thanks for your help as always!
<p>Excellent work holding Dnipropetrovsk, Herr General! The Soviets have been beaten back for now and the Panther-Wotan line is secure, but rest assured that their offensive is not over yet. Be prepared for immediate deployment as their next crossing attempt will certainly come soon!</p>
KremenchugB_decisive.pzbrf now reads
<p>Great work holding the Panther-Wotan Line once again, Herr General! As before, the Soviets have been beaten back for now and the line is secure, but rest assured that their offensive is still not over yet. Intelligence seems to believe the next attack will strike somewhere North of Kiev, so we will be redeploying you to that sector. If they manage to encircle Kiev as we were able to do 2 years ago, our ability to hold the city will be seriously jeopardized!</p>
All issues above this post have been addressed. Thanks for your help as always!
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Weird sentence in the marginal victory text for Prokhorovka,
"Almost you managed an acceptable performance under the harshest conditions. your failture to dominate the field at Prokhorovka has sealed the fate of Operation Citadel.
Perhaps change it to something like
"Herr General, you managed an acceptable performance under exceedingly harsh conditions. However, your failure to dominate the field....."
"Almost you managed an acceptable performance under the harshest conditions. your failture to dominate the field at Prokhorovka has sealed the fate of Operation Citadel.
Perhaps change it to something like
"Herr General, you managed an acceptable performance under exceedingly harsh conditions. However, your failure to dominate the field....."
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Oboyan seems to be alright briefing wise.
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All text issues above this post have been addressed.